Hope

When you sense the wave of despair,

don’t abstain, drink in the air;

let the mind unsheathe and fly free

for the best thing is just to be.

 

The thrill of life cleanses the edge,

charting a course the clearest pledge

of dreams mixed in the broiling pot,

casting off the encrusted rot.

 

A raft of hope will lift you up,

dispersing fast the tongue-tied rut;

who knows what wonders will appear?

look within and dance with no fear.

 

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4 responses to “Hope

  1. Beautiful… I read on a blog just today that faith gives you two options:

    “When you come to the edge of all the light you know, and are about to step off into the darkness of the unknown, faith is knowing that one of two things will happen:
    – There will be something solid to stand on, or
    – You will be taught to fly.”

    http://t.co/Rnt0BNda

  2. Thank you for your kind words. I love this notion that faith can provide us with a range of options, irrespective of one’s philosophical, cultural or religious beliefs. I think that it was Kahlil Gibran who said that “Faith is a knowledge within the heart, beyond the reach of proof.”

  3. I really like how you’ve handled the rhyme, especially in the middle stanza. The rhyme flings the reader through the poem without coming off as trite at all. One thing, if you don’t mind some crit: rhythmically, the word “with” in the very last line doesn’t sit with me well (and is the only thing in the poem that doesn’t). Personally I like the line better without it: “Look within, and dance no fear.”

    • It is great to read your thoughts. Delighted to hear that you like this and, no, I don’t mind to hear about your reservations regarding the last line. I struggled when I wrote this and decided to leave “with” in. Perhaps I was too considerate? Your idea to excise seems to me perfectly sensible. Writing is never static, I find, and am certain that if I rewrote this, there would be a couple of revisions.

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